I found it tricky to use a similes.
Next time i would add more powerful verbs.
Making huts
When I was little ( I still am )I played hide and seek tags and hang upside down on huge monkey bars, but most of
all I love making huts with Thomas and my four best friends Morgan Isabelle and Eva C and last of all Arabella.
blankets covered the chairs that guarded us from other teams. The bible's weighed the blankets down.The pigs clipped the blankets on to the chairs. Then the bickering started.
“I said don't bust our hut!
“I AM NOT!!!”
“BE QUIET!!!”
“STOP!!!!”
there was a silence for a minute and then Mrs Naden said “BUST YOUR HUTS NOW!!!!!”
we did not want to bast our hats because we were having so much fun.That was making huts.
No comments:
Post a Comment
Thank you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comments:
Positive - something done well
Thoughtful - a sentence to let me know that you have read, watched or listened to my blog
Helpful - give some ideas for next time or ask a question
Note: only a member of this blog may post a comment.